The backbone of the financial institution is the system, and Information Technology dept. responsible for it also needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS. 聽起來自然嗎?

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ARMYYY2977 · Answer

Your sentence is a run on or it is too long and you are missing  a few words.

It should be:

​‎The backbone of the financial institution is the system, and Information Technology department is responsible for it. It needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

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dogbydog · Answer

The backbone of the financial institution is the system. The Information Technology Department  responsible for the system also needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

Akshay3107 · Answer

Your sentence is a bit unnatural. It should be:

The backbone of the financial institution is the system. The Information Technology department is responsible for it. It needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

GrJohnstone · Answer

The backbone of the financial institution is the (banking information) system which is under the responsibility of the Information and Technology department. The (banking information ) system requires the security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

The system is vague, and could mean something else, I recommend putting a descriptor in front of it to ensure understanding. Computer system, printing system, payroll system... 

I recommend using a relative pronoun to link two sentences together to avoid repeating "the system". 

I suggest "the security measures" because PCIDSS has specific rules to follow and criteria to meet, not just a vague requirement of something. I would say why they need the PCIDSS security measures.  

For example: "The (banking information ) system requires the security measures pursuant to PCIDSS in order to be allowed to interact with other systems."

or "The (banking information ) system requires the security measures pursuant to PCIDSS in order for us to have insurance against liability."

I hope this was helpful.

The backbone of the financial institution is the system, and Information Technology dept. responsible for it also needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS. 聼起來自然嗎?

Your sentence is a run on or it is too long and you are missing a few words.

It should be:

‎The backbone of the financial institution is the system, and Information Technology department is responsible for it. It needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

Hope it helps

The backbone of the financial institution is the system. The Information Technology Department responsible for the system also needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

Your sentence is a bit unnatural. It should be:

The backbone of the financial institution is the system. The Information Technology department is responsible for it. It needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

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The backbone of the financial institution is the system, and Information Technology dept. responsible for it also needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS. 聼起來自然嗎?

Your sentence is a run on or it is too long and you are missing a few words.It should be:​‎The backbone of the financial institution is the system, and Information Technology department is responsible for it. It needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS. Hope it helps

The backbone of the financial institution is the system. The Information Technology Department responsible for the system also needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

Your sentence is a bit unnatural. It should be:The backbone of the financial institution is the system. The Information Technology department is responsible for it. It needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

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Your sentence is a run on or it is too long and you are missing a few words.

It should be:

‎The backbone of the financial institution is the system, and Information Technology department is responsible for it. It needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.

Hope it helps

Your sentence is a bit unnatural. It should be:

The backbone of the financial institution is the system. The Information Technology department is responsible for it. It needs security measures pursuant to PCIDSS.