Could you review my essay ~ ?

Q: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

A: I disagree that studying history and literature is more important than science and mathematics.
We can learn scientific theory and fundamental of mechanical motions of course from science and mathematics study.
But, knowledge about it is not all. We should know history of nations and then learn wisdom of ancestors.
And by reading literature, our mind is opened and analyze and experience the world through someone else’s mind.
It inspire us with new and unpredictable imaginations, giving us hope and dream.

As a result, studying science and mathematics as well as history, literature are important.

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Could you review my essay ~ ?

Q: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

A: I disagree that studying history and literature is more important than science and mathematics.
We can learn scientific theory and fundamental of mechanical motions of course from science and mathematics study.
But, knowledge about it is not all. We should know history of nations and then learn wisdom of ancestors. 
And by reading literature, our mind is opened and analyze and experience the world through someone else’s mind. 
It inspire us with new and unpredictable imaginations, giving us hope and dream.

As a result, studying science and mathematics as well as history, literature are important.

anaikkk · Answer

Is that a writing practice for ielts?

anaikkk · Answer

This is good and has no issues in my opinion. But There are certain rules that should be followed in writing. I think it‘s best if you check them out and try to improve your writing skills 👍🏻