My favorite city is Lang Son, located in the North of Viet Nam. This is where I was born and raised, a beautiful city with cool and warm weather , therefore , this place attracts a lot of tourists. When tourists come here , you will be able to admire scenic spots: Tam Thanh-Nhi Thanh cave, Tien pagoda,... And more famous here is Mau Son Dinh with ancient and myterious architecture that attracts viewers.
The famous specialty here is: vit quay, banh cuon made from a traditional recipe, so people should not miss ít when coming to Lang Son.
And the people here are very friendly and funny. I love my hometown Lang Son, I hope here thirive and attract more tourists.

Help me correct my grammar structure!!!

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My favorite city is Lang Son, located in the North of Viet Nam. This is where I was born and raised, a beautiful city with cool and warm weather , therefore , this place attracts a lot of tourists. When tourists come here , you will be able to admire scenic spots: Tam Thanh-Nhi Thanh cave, Tien pagoda,... And more famous here is Mau Son Dinh with ancient and myterious architecture that attracts viewers.
    The famous specialty here is: vit quay, banh cuon made from a traditional recipe, so people should not miss ít when coming to Lang Son.
   And the people here are very friendly and funny. I love my hometown Lang Son, I hope here thirive and attract more tourists.

Help me correct my grammar structure!!!

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@miuchic

My favorite city is Lang Son, located in the North of Viet Nam, where I was born and raised. It's a beautiful city with cool and warm weather, and therefore attracts a lot of tourists. When you come here , you can admire these scenic spots: Tam Thanh-Nhi Thanh cave, Tien pagoda, and the famous Mau Son Dinh with its ancient and mysterious architecture that attracts many viewers.
    The famous specialty here is vit quay, banh cuon made from a traditional recipe. Do not miss it!
   The people here are very friendly and funny. I love my hometown Lang Son, so I hope it thrives and attracts more tourists.