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Numerous workers do not exercise frequently either during the business days or in their rest time; as a result of this situation, workers tend to have health problems. I believe that chiefly reason for this problem is desiring an enjoyable activity for; also, company should encourage workers work out to solve this problem. In what follows, I will further explain my viewpoint.

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Numerous workers do not exercise frequently, either during their business days or in their rest time. As a result, workers tend to have some health problems. I believe that chiefly the reason for this problem is the desire for an enjoyable activity. Also, companies should find ways to encourage workers to work out more to help solve this problem. I will now further explain my viewpoint.

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