I hope someone can help me correct this article which is written by myself:
I am a faithful reader of your newspaper. I'm writing the letter to express my deepest concern about "white pollution ". We can see it everywhere in our city although some measures have been taken.
"White pollution " will affect our daily life heavily if it not been dealt well, like polluting our water, environment and so on . The suggestions are as follows. To the begin with, our government should take more measures to prevent the action of using plastic bags as less as possible . For example,they can raise appropriately the price of plastic bags in order that people will use less plastic bags or they can provide other bags for recycle using to substitute those plastic bags. In addition , our citizens must raise the awareness of its gravity. Otherwise our generation can not live well in the future because we have only one earth.
Thanks for you due attention to this article again!

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I hope someone can help me correct this article which is written by myself:
  I am a faithful reader of your newspaper. I'm writing the letter to express my deepest concern about "white pollution ". We can see it everywhere in our city although some measures have been taken.
  "White pollution " will affect our daily life heavily if it not been dealt well, like polluting our water, environment and so on . The suggestions are as follows. To the begin with, our government should take more measures to prevent the action of using plastic bags as less as possible . For example,they can raise appropriately the price of plastic bags in order that people will use less plastic bags or they can provide other bags for recycle using to substitute those plastic bags. In addition , our citizens must raise the awareness of its gravity. Otherwise our generation can not live well in the future because we have only one earth. 
  Thanks for you due attention to this article again!

memehime · Answer

It's more or less fine. 
You could try this too.

"  I am a faithful reader of your newspaper. I'm writing this letter to express my deepest concern about "white pollution ". We are seeing it everywhere in our city although some measures have been taken.
  "White pollution " will affect our daily life heavily if it is not dealt with properly, like polluting our water, environment and so on . The suggestions are as follows. To  begin with, our government should take more measures to prevent the usage of plastic bags as much as possible . For example,they can raise the price of plastic bags appropriately so that people will use less plastic bags or they can provide other recyclable bags as a  substitute to those plastic bags. In addition , our citizens must raise the awareness of its gravity. Otherwise our generation can not live well in the future because we have only one earth. "

hope it helps!

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